A while ago I asked for some help on this blog. I was working on the proposal I needed to send to the editor, and I asked for your opinion on the back cover blurbs I had to write. If you want to see what I originally came up with, click here.
And here is what I finally sent in.
Jennifer Hamilton’s husband never told her about his secret life. Or his business partner. Or the real reason they were living in Uganda. So when he’s killed in a car wreck, she and their three children are stranded 9,000 miles away from safety. It’s up to this business partner to help Jennifer rescue her children from the attacking rebels. But can she trust him to help find out the secrets her husband may have hidden before he died? And can she find those secrets before they cost her life?
And here is my one line sales pitch.
Jennifer Hamilton has no idea how much of her husband’s life was a secret. What she doesn’t know could kill her.
Thanks so much for your help! In case you're wondering, opinion was pretty much split evenly between the two choices. I tried to blend aspects of each paragraph and added in a little of what my husband had to say. : ) I submitted my proposal last week, and I can expect to hear something some time within the next three months. When they contact me they could ask to see some more of the manuscript. (Good) Or they could ask to see all of the manuscript (Better). Or they could say thanks but no thanks. (Very, very bad)
Keep praying for me and I'll keep you posted!